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This is how it all began
Before my weary eyes could see
This is where they took my soul
Ripped it up then put it back in me

This is where my hands did bleed
Across a snowy ground of leaves
My digging nails found no value
No relief beneath the trees

This is what they said to me;
"My dear old friend I swear to thee
I'll fix your problems right and left
I'll end your suffering."

This is when I told a lie
Beneath a windswept, starry sky
"There is nothing wrong with me."
My lips part to deny

This is why I came to you
Because your words, they cut and chew
Slash through the mess they put inside
Take out and start anew.
Written for the last chapter of a story I've been working on for awhile now.
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DesdemonaKakalose's avatar
An odd reaction: It reminded me SO VERY MUCH of Vargas.

But I love the rhythm, and some of the phrases are just to die for--I love the stanza "This is when...to deny"

And the concept is just mysterious enough to make you think, and universal to an extent, along the same vein as "The Logical Song", if that means anything to you.

I like the full circle of the soul being torn, almost like a cycle, and still the promise of hope at the end.